Saturday, January 2, 2010

No Kissing? Fun!

Normally, I would never post over the weekend, but this retaliation to kissing day had too much allure for me to resist. Thanks to Frankie for hosting this one!

But first... I hit 50 followers! A fact that has me completely in awe and full of gratitude! So this means celebrating! I'm talking book give-away in the not so distant future! Yea!

Okay, back to my scene. I kept it short and, really, it was a quick modify from my book since I actually don't have an almost kissing scene. I hope you enjoy!



      “So what does your hunger for power have to do with this year’s harvest pouring into the city for Feasting Day?”
      “Everything.” He winked.
      “Mmm… One of your many surprises?”
      “You won’t have too wait very long for this one. I promise.”
      Another gust of wind brought a loose strand of hair across her face. He brushed it behind her ear with one hand while holding the cloak in place with the other. She thought of Dreiyn and a knot formed in her stomach.
      A soft fire roared within Ithon’s eyes as he stared at her. She felt a sudden attraction for him that began an internal battle. She pushed against the emotions just as they tugged, then yanked, at her. It wasn’t the first time she’d experienced the feeling, but she was not about to let herself fall in love with him. It didn’t matter how appealing his lips looked. She felt herself lean forward at the thought and quickly severed it with another. She had one goal in mind. Change. She had every intention of ruling over the guild one day. Once she was in power, the senseless murdering would cease. She stared at Ithon as she pushed aside her feelings. The barrage of emotions ended as abruptly as it had begun.
      “You must have really loved him,” he said.
      “What are you talking about?” She felt panic at the thought of Ithon being able to read her mind. Was that possible?

22 comments:

  1. Nicely written! Your characters are really intriguing :)

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  2. I love how Ithon tucks her hair back, a small, intimate gesture that shows his regard. And she is intriguing, battling with lost loves, new attraction and her ambition. Nice job.

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  3. Yikes, someone who can read your mind? That would be scary! Especially if you think you are falling in love with that person.

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  4. A soft fire, an internal battle. Nice job! I loved these descriptions!

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  5. I love the roar of fire in his eyes...sigh. Very nice! Very nice, indeed! :)

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  6. I like his mind-reading comment at the end. I can just imagine what he must have been seeing in her face while she struggled with her emotions. Thanks for sharing this.

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  7. 50 followers! Yeah for you! That's a great scene.

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  8. oooh wow very nice and thank you sooooo much for posting on the weekend for the fest!!! Your support and participation really made this day special!:-) and congrats on the 50 followers!!

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  9. Thanks so much, everyone, for getting me to 50 followers and for taking the time to read my blog and this excerpt in particular. Nakine and Ithon are my favorite characters so I'm really glad you like them too. I appreciate your comments!

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  10. 50 followers? Congrats! I like the piece you wrote. Very intriguing!

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  11. So very lovely. This no-kiss thing is driving me nuts, though!

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  12. Very nice, Nisa! :)

    *weeps for D* I love the fact that Ithon can't control Nakine. :)

    Congrats on 50 followers, and *cheers* for book give aways!

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  13. This was so fun, Nisa!! Mind readers and almost kisses? What a fabulous combination!

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  14. Nisa- I sent you a message... ;)

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  15. This is good...."She leaned forward at the thought and quickly severed it with another."

    Nice work. Oh, and I like that quote from Tom Clancy.

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  16. Thank you all! I love the comments!

    Bethany, I know! Too much tension for one day!

    Danyelle, I'm sad for him too. He was so kind!

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  17. Ooooh, very intriguing. There is lots in there that has me wanting to read this story. Thanks for sharing, Nisa!!

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  18. Ithon is such a cool name! And I want to know more about the murders... Cool :-)

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  19. Thanks, Eileen! Hopefully, I can get it solid enough that everyone will get to read it soon! (Soon is such a relative term...)

    Thanks, Sara. I love that name too! This book has plenty of murders to learn about... ;)

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